Strong start, but “that was the point” adds little extra information. The subject of the point needs more exposition.
“Unfortunately sometimes they grow too big”
“Unfortunately Steve’s was cancerous”
“Unfortunately they need the right food”
Etc.
That said, the quality of the submission is not for the overzealous Mod to rule on. It should certainly have been posted, at the minimum for others to critique and improve.
Strong start, but “that was the point” adds little extra information. The subject of the point needs more exposition.
“Unfortunately sometimes they grow too big”
“Unfortunately Steve’s was cancerous”
“Unfortunately they need the right food”
Etc.
That said, the quality of the submission is not for the overzealous Mod to rule on. It should certainly have been posted, at the minimum for others to critique and improve.